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Drawing A Manga, Attempt 2 by DukeStewart Drawing A Manga, Attempt 2 by DukeStewart
This is a second try at drawing the most legitimate looking traditional manga I can.

If I put more effort into this, I'm sure I could have come up with proper screentones, but there you go. Photoshop is the ultimate cheat.

Looking back I can at least see I've improved a little.
Here's the first one I did.
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I said it before and I'll say it again. FEEDBACK!!!
I need it so damn much.
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:iconfaisangirl:
faisangirl Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
nice. you people inspire me.
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:icondoomkasier-zombie:
Doomkasier-Zombie Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student General Artist
How long did this take you?
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
good question. I did it bit by bit, but I would have to say 3 hours overall
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:icondoomkasier-zombie:
Doomkasier-Zombie Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student General Artist
so even with a good knowladge of using photoshop, things like this will still take a while?
sorry for the questions, just interested in the digital artists is all XD
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
Oh no worries. It took a long time mostly because of the penwork.
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:icondoomkasier-zombie:
Doomkasier-Zombie Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student General Artist
I bet it did XD
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:icondoylehi:
Doylehi Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
hmm, think its good, but im not feeling the third panel. mabe its just me. but, all in all, its good!
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:iconizzu-shi:
Izzu-shi Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010  Student Digital Artist
this is awesome!
the shading is done well
and you can tell that he's really in pain
good job!
:iconimsohappyplz:
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:icondarkcat13:
Darkcat13 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
the second one look better than the first one :3

this one's awesome ^^
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:iconyamamotomisuko:
YamamotoMisuko Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
make this into a comic becau onse it's really good and I wanna know what's going
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
Well, it's based on an idea I had a long time ago...
BTW, fire ain't real, but the pain is.
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:iconyamamotomisuko:
YamamotoMisuko Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
dude what time is it over there it's 9 in the evening here
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
uuuuh......6:16.

PM
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:iconyamamotomisuko:
YamamotoMisuko Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010
so how's everything in your time zone? I just got back from a convention and I'm kinda tired
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010
well, exams are upon us like a horrible disease, and I haven't done much...stu-dy-ing
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:iconyamamotomisuko:
YamamotoMisuko Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010
I nearly killed myself today at the hetalia gathering when I dressed as Anastasia
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:iconsuka-chan13:
Suka-chan13 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010  Student Artist
I like your positioning
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:iconet7-13artstudio:
ET7-13ArtStudio Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010  Hobbyist Filmographer
this is alot better than me when im tring to draw a manga page perfectly
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:iconsora-sara-chan:
Sora-sara-chan Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
Looks really good. Looks like it came out of a manga 8'D
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:iconshadowassasin17:
ShadowAssasin17 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
do you want anykind of specific feedback?
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
whatever you think it needs
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:iconshadowassasin17:
ShadowAssasin17 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
hrrrmmm. you could make you eyes just a little bit smaller.
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:iconzeimitakahashi:
ZeimiTakahashi Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
Well, I see a lot of improvement. ;v;
....
I have no idea what else to say.
:iconsulkplz:
I faaaail.
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:iconelf-healer:
Elf-healer Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
It looks pretty good! :D
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:iconusagi323:
usagi323 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Nice!^^ Who's that other dude?
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
....I don't know...
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:iconroxj:
Roxj Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
o.o drawing a very cool manga nyeh
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:icondragonwing71:
dragonwing71 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
I can't post official critiques... but I can post one here ^_^
Well, I have to say that I really love the panel where it shows a close-up of the eye (the one that's in the upper right on the left page... if it's a page.) The expression is very awesome, and I love how you drew and lined it.
All-in-all, I'd have to say that I think this is a really good job for a second attempt at making a manga page. How did you get the accurate black and white tones, by the way? Did you just use the gray tones or what?
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
all the tones were done in photoshop.
That one I think was done with a gradient that was put through a grain filter
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:icondragonwing71:
dragonwing71 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Really? Hm... well, I'll have to try it out sometime ^_^
Thanks!
And awesome job!
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nextAlexander23 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
It looks extremely good!
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Thanks
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:iconshrewdbiscuit:
ShrewdBiscuit Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Pretty good looking
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Thanks
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:iconmillistaza13:
Millistaza13 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student General Artist
Pretty cool...much better than I can do. ^^;
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
^_^ Thanks
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:iconmillistaza13:
Millistaza13 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student General Artist
Welcome. :meow:
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:icontakamurabros:
TakamuraBros Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
This manga page looks almost professional. The proportions seems accurate and the fcial expression tell what he is thinking. All it's missing is some dialogue and sound effects.
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
That's more than I can say for the last one...
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:iconroxydragoness:
RoxyDragoness Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
hmmmm I can't tell exactly what's going on here, but lol this looks interesting =w= I'd be interested to see what kind of manga you'd come up with :meow:
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
One day I'll bother to put in speech bubbles...
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:iconroxydragoness:
RoxyDragoness Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010
one day ;D
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:iconiclhstudios:
ICLHStudios Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Professional General Artist
Looks pretty good, I think the panels would look better if their lines were thicker, also if you look at manga you'll notice that the horizontal spaces between panels are bigger than the vertical ones, these both help the make the panels clearer and easier to read and adds a little bit of professional polish to the work.
I would also recommend adding a little line width variation in the artwork itself, it helps it look less obviously computer drawn.
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Well, it was done with pen...
but okay^_^ duly noted
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:iconiclhstudios:
ICLHStudios Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Professional General Artist
Ah, sorry about that, it looked sort of computer drawn, suggestions still stand though.

Keep up the good work, and if you ever want any more feedback I'd be more than happy to help.
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NoLimit5 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
I think it's okay, but I do have a few constructive criticisms to deliver:

The panels, to me, are a little too streamlined and neat. What I mean is that the panels are just simple boxes. Mix it up a little! Have some overlapping ones, or diagonal ones or...yeah.

The images themselves aren't entirely clear either. For example, it doesn't show you falling to your knees. I mean, yeah. It's OBVIOUS, but it'd be pretty dramatic to see, you know? As well as WHY you started screaming. From what it looks like, it looks like because your foot got set on fire. :XD:

Otherwise, I think it's all right. ^^;
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:icondukestewart:
DukeStewart Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
rightyo. thanks very much!
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:icononslaught14:
Onslaught14 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student General Artist
Random Asshole: U fail! U wanna know why, Cuz im a jerk! :evillaugh:

Me: Well im evil and insane! :chainsaw:

*5 minutes later*

Me: Well now ur not a jerk, ur just dead. :iconikilleditplz: Oh, and this is pretty damn good!!!
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:iconpouchnoubout:
pouchnoubout Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student Digital Artist
It is way better than the last one for sure.Gotta love the fifth pannel!( or the sixth XD)
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:iconsander94:
sander94 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
your manga is really good!!
i would say that it should belong in the manga-books at the bookstore.

but if i may: give more atention to shading in the hairstyles.
bcuz (i think) a detail face next to a non-detail hairstylegives a bit of a wierd look-at.
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